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A pox, a blight...your c/c please. Thank you.?

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A pox, a blight...your c/c please. Thank you.?

Postby burke5 » Tue Nov 20, 2012 1:44 am

A pox, a blight, a cursed end
An instance of regret.
hope comes, rings out – a message send
That love will pay the debt.

Let Earth endure, and hands be lent
Give edge to fading age
Let faith assert and stars assent
the damage assuage
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Postby ruodrik » Tue Nov 20, 2012 1:47 am

In the wake of the triple disaster of T?hoku Chih? Taiheiy?-oki Jishin and three threatened nuclear meltdowns, this is a poignant poem. If 'love' cannot 'pay the debt,' some well-placed humanitarian aid would be a good start. This is a crisis with potentially international ramifications, since the Nikkei heikin kabuka of the Tokyo Stock Exchange has a powerful effect on what happens in Manhattan and consequently the rest of the world. So it's an economic tipping point as well.

As for your poem, it's generally very good. I am less certain of the concluding line or two because your last line seems short a beat, even though it has the full complement of meaning. Maybe I'm misreading it, maybe not. What if you modified the last line thus: "All damage be assuaged," trading an exact for an assonance-driven pararhyme and sharpening the syntax at the same time. Or maybe I care too much about the ballad stanza... LOL It's your call, amigo!
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Postby rald » Tue Nov 20, 2012 1:54 am

Thanks Benny. The situation in Sendai continues to become more precarious. Especially at Reactor #2. To my friends in Tokyo, you are in my prayers...
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Postby colvyr » Tue Nov 20, 2012 2:05 am

Your message bleeds its hope
onto my sorry page,
I barely seem to cope
these days, I am a lesser mage.
If from the cauldron I draw up
a potion to suffice,
will it work its wonders at last
without a heavy price?


Sorry I missed your other poem Benny my connection is not working well.
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Postby emiliano72 » Tue Nov 20, 2012 2:20 am

Oh your words today are very pleasing. You write with such hope it almost hurts - but in a good way. The Sanctuary and now this makes me feel I should never write again, leaving a bad taste. I'm in one of those moods- I think you are amazing.
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Postby emiliano72 » Tue Nov 20, 2012 2:24 am

Over the last couple of weeks there have been some dreadful natural disasters. When I read your poem, I could see nothing else. It's a time for everyone to pull together. Very thought provoking and a strong write from you
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Postby hoireabard » Tue Nov 20, 2012 2:43 am

Certainly timely and topical,
AND it can relate to the most recent
happening nor so much an attack by the
Earth Mother. but a message of sorts
we are all as fragile and shifting as her crust

Good read this Ben.
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Postby macrae » Tue Nov 20, 2012 2:56 am

i love it.

"Let Earth endure, and hands be lent
Give edge to fading age
Let faith assert and stars assent
the damage assuage"

this part blew me away.
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Postby porter49 » Tue Nov 20, 2012 3:05 am

this place this earth
this gracious Queen
has felt the tears that wept
still knows the sacrifice
for love has paid the debt
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Postby connlaoi » Tue Nov 20, 2012 3:14 am

this place this earth
this gracious Queen
has felt the tears that wept
still knows the sacrifice
for love has paid the debt
They say the best gifts come in small packages.
I heartily agree in this instance.
This poem is dynamite.
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